Musing about a repost.

"天知る 地知る 我知る 人知る (Ten Shiru, Chi Shiru, Ware Shiru, Hito Shiru. (Heaven Knows, Earth Knows, You know, I know.))"

Anyway. Found a few errors myself, will post a more edited and polished version. I hope it's good. Also, I hope it didn't feel TOO dark. There was a rather huge irony running through it all that while it seems dark, it's all a sham, a trick. You need to Google "Rosenhan Experiment" to understand it fully, though.

Changed "Nurse" to "Doctor". No-one told me that Nurse's aren't really supposed to be diagnosing patients/giving medicine =/ Or, pointed it out, rather. Maybe now, fine. But this is 1973.

Changed the structure of the "report" paragraphs. Instead of it being 5,2,4,3,1 made it simpler to follow, 5,4,3,2,1. That way, at the end, they don't have to do a lot of work to find the "original" story.

Also, added in the first paragraph which I accidentally deleted in that version.

(I feel like Toady One. What with his long list of updates this version. Might pick up DF sometime.....maybe not. Will. Abstain. From. Excessive. Time. Wasting.)

Added in a word count, which totals 800, which include everything on the document. That means title, my name, year and also, the three words at the bottom, "Word Count: 800"

Might reword things, too. Feels as if I don't have enough description about the physical characteristics of the person. They feel a tad 2D. I mean, I have a doctor who is trying to do her best, but has a smoking habit which they're slowly breaking. An "extra" who does nothing. And a character who by all means should be normal, but isn't. I don't know how people get dark marks around their arms and wrists. Ok, well. Explained it with tatoos. Which were relatively uncommon, but they were around in 1973.

800 words...

Might pick up something else later.

Hoping I don't make really dodgy errors.